Community Story: In the style of SeattleSmutWriter

[_Bond James Bond]

Story to be titled "On The Sabbath".

Sequel coming soon.

Can that be titled Sabbath Splash"?

Could be. Blixa is editor-and-chief of the project. "On The Sabbath" is a working title.

[_Bond James Bond]

"I'm a classical Old World historian. Mind if I think of a chariot driven by horses?" Jayme interjected.

"I ejaculated" Lehi sheepishly said.

Edit that to read, "I splashed".

This passage was meant to create a subtle alliteration between the ending of Jayme's thought and Lehi's sheepish admission. ;P

[_moksha]

Admission from what appeared to be an emission by the near semitic-looking appendage which now languished while title foray and compilation effort, by the valiant Blixa, was underway.

[_ludwigm]

That damned time zone...

After that sweet moments, he could think about one thing; his mind was filled with one thought; he exploded as a volcanic eruption: Honey, if you feel the same, then gimme a beer!

(can fits after the ejaculation...)

[_Bond James Bond]

That damned time zone...

After that sweet moments, he could think about one thing; his mind was filled with one thought; he exploded as a volcanic eruption: Honey, if you feel the same, then gimme a beer!

(can fits after the ejaculation...)

Ludwig,

The story has ended. A new chapter will begin soon. . .

[_ludwigm]

That damned time zone...

Ludwig,

The story has ended. A new chapter will begin soon. . .

That damned time zone I live in...

[_MsJack]

Jayme languidly rose from her margarine colored bed, and delicately tipped toed down stairs to fetch her morning coffee.

I like how the principle character's name is spelled "J-A-Y-M-E." Giving weird spellings to perfectly ordinary names is totally a Utah thing to do.

Not quite as distinctly Utahn as adding prefixes such as "Le" and "O" to otherwise ordinary names, but it's up there.

[_rich kelsey]

ludwigm wrote:
That damned time zone...

After that sweet moments, he could think about one thing; his mind was filled with one thought; he exploded as a volcanic eruption: Honey, if you feel the same, then gimme a beer!

ludwigm, If you were to follow the original author's style you may consider adding one word to the text in question.

Please consider the wording:

"if you feel the same, then gimme a wet beer!"

[_ludwigm]

... consider the wording ...

You know, as non-english, I am handicapped.

[_Nightlion]

... consider the wording ...

You know, as non-english, I am handicapped.

I will not admit to so much as reading this entire thread but did note the end from the beginning.(?) Your last beer line, you being European I suppose, was most hilarious. I think it deserves a footnote at least or inclusion somehow if the editor would allow it.